08-18-2015, 06:36 AM
Hello A.P.
Welcome to the Pen. I hope you find the "vets" helpful...
It was a wise choice to place this piece in the MILD section of the farm, because the SERIOUS hogs could really chew this one apart. That would've been a really rough way to start off.
A.P., my friend, you may have set a new record for cramming as many disjointed images onto a single page as possible. Please don't take pride in that. The "less is more" axiom is going to be tossed your way... probably by everyone.
You can only throw so many words at my eyeballs before the words just start to ricochet off my retinas.
I cannot critique what I can't understand, but I will repeat that "less is more". Please put down the machine gun and I bet you'll hit the target more frequently, and more cleanly. Right now you're blasting through the entire shooting range and killing everybody in it.
Something tells me that you DO have a way with words. Just use less of them...
... Mark
Welcome to the Pen. I hope you find the "vets" helpful...
It was a wise choice to place this piece in the MILD section of the farm, because the SERIOUS hogs could really chew this one apart. That would've been a really rough way to start off.
A.P., my friend, you may have set a new record for cramming as many disjointed images onto a single page as possible. Please don't take pride in that. The "less is more" axiom is going to be tossed your way... probably by everyone.
You can only throw so many words at my eyeballs before the words just start to ricochet off my retinas.
I cannot critique what I can't understand, but I will repeat that "less is more". Please put down the machine gun and I bet you'll hit the target more frequently, and more cleanly. Right now you're blasting through the entire shooting range and killing everybody in it.
Something tells me that you DO have a way with words. Just use less of them...
... Mark