08-31-2015, 09:42 PM
Not a critique so much as I was just trying to figure it out.
Genevieve Went Down to Ask Him Why
I can't remember nothing beautiful, the doctors say. <- this is the premise
No pretty songs, but just the harder words of Amazing Grace. <- example #1
There's rust above the Champ de Mars, <- example #2 -- he can't see the beauty in the Eiffel Tower, only its rust
and terrible, the threat of gravity somewhere, swirling, north of Flagstaff, Arizona. <- example #3 ?? This is the one I can't figure out.
"Area 51" is northwest, not north, of Flagstaff -- but maybe that's close enough?
If not, does it have something to do with this?:
Dust is all that I can think, if you asked, "What's a sunset like?" <- example #4
And when I read my whorley rushing words about the flavor of a "tangerine"?
They scare me. What mad man dared such blasphemies against our God
of Heaven? Underlined and circled them so violently his pencil lead broke off? <- example #5 ... he could only taste the bad side
of a tangerine's flavor, made notes about what it was,
and evidently got really perturbed about it.
That's why I'm sitting in the basement, Todd. <- A: the basement is so icky that it doesn't have a good side.
This means that it doesn't induce the conflict associated with examples 1 thru 5
so it's one of the few places he feels comfortable.
B: When he looks at Genevieve he can only see her ugly side which he calls "Todd"
Genevieve Went Down to Ask Him Why
I can't remember nothing beautiful, the doctors say. <- this is the premise
No pretty songs, but just the harder words of Amazing Grace. <- example #1
There's rust above the Champ de Mars, <- example #2 -- he can't see the beauty in the Eiffel Tower, only its rust
and terrible, the threat of gravity somewhere, swirling, north of Flagstaff, Arizona. <- example #3 ?? This is the one I can't figure out.
"Area 51" is northwest, not north, of Flagstaff -- but maybe that's close enough?
If not, does it have something to do with this?:
And when I read my whorley rushing words about the flavor of a "tangerine"?
They scare me. What mad man dared such blasphemies against our God
of Heaven? Underlined and circled them so violently his pencil lead broke off? <- example #5 ... he could only taste the bad side
of a tangerine's flavor, made notes about what it was,
and evidently got really perturbed about it.
That's why I'm sitting in the basement, Todd. <- A: the basement is so icky that it doesn't have a good side.
This means that it doesn't induce the conflict associated with examples 1 thru 5
so it's one of the few places he feels comfortable.
B: When he looks at Genevieve he can only see her ugly side which he calls "Todd"
a brightly colored fungus that grows in bark inclusions