09-13-2015, 12:41 PM
(09-13-2015, 11:28 AM)billy Wrote: a suggestion for the title would beThanks, you're right, using "spectacle" doesn't work. I was using it to connote
9/11 vision, are the [for]'s needed in the first section?
"bread-and-circus", but that's not the first meaning that comes to a reader's mind.
I don't like "vision" because it's something that's going to happen as opposed to
something that already has. Looking at the poem again, I think that "pays off"
more accurately portrays it. See what you think.
I got rid of the "for" 's as well, yep, works much better. Yes?
a brightly colored fungus that grows in bark inclusions

