10-09-2015, 08:22 PM
(10-09-2015, 08:15 PM)Weeded Wrote: Rivernotch,The general rules I got from this book on haikus I've only just started on states that haikus (in Japanese) should be
Glad you like this. I was referencing the principle of fight or flight in this, I decided to attack it with puns. Yeah I guess the ending is, huh? I'm still trying to get down the proper content for haikus ha
1. as plain as possible
2. as pointy as possible (that is, they must have a turn somewhere)
3. as pastoral as possible (well, not pastoral, but I like my alliterations. They must have one "seasonal" or "natural" word)
4. and as 5-7-5 as possible.
In English, I think only the first three rules apply. Then there's poems that only follow the first two rules, and there's a specific term for that, but I don't remember. Anyway, point is, I don't think three line these sorts of three line poems generally have to have the same philosophy with their messages: they could be happy, sad, angry, whatever, as long as they follow those first two rules, which your poem does follow. So no need to be really concerned with your message, I guess, unless you wanna flesh it out more or whatever. (which in three lines, you actually can! The world of haiku is astoundingly deep, like a good sewer system)