10-13-2015, 01:59 AM
Very interesting picture, Ray, so desolate, so lonely...
It's always time to feed the cats, isn't it? I like the way that bit of reality snaps us back from the abstract thoughts that preceded it.
The F-word twists the meaning of the line "any fucking thing I want" reflecting the anger of the writer. (I hope you use Keith's suggestion to shorten that line. Makes it more powerful.)
When you say "I'm free" in the last verse, I can feel the irony, and sadness,of that "freedom".
And then there's that picture-- a poem in itself.
Thanks Ray,
... Mark
It's always time to feed the cats, isn't it? I like the way that bit of reality snaps us back from the abstract thoughts that preceded it.
The F-word twists the meaning of the line "any fucking thing I want" reflecting the anger of the writer. (I hope you use Keith's suggestion to shorten that line. Makes it more powerful.)
When you say "I'm free" in the last verse, I can feel the irony, and sadness,of that "freedom".
And then there's that picture-- a poem in itself.
Thanks Ray,
... Mark