10-25-2015, 09:38 AM
cheek/asses and crowing cock all have sexual connotations for me, the crowing cock stands out of the poem as the most relevant phrase; it shows predisposition towards cock [his homosexuality], his refusal to be as st peter and deny his sexual inclinations [peter denied god], and Reading goal, the crowing cock being a turning point in his life, a wake up call.
i suppose i could find something i didn't like about or within the poem but to do so i'd have to take the part out of context. the inversion in the very first line is something i'd normally call out but the poem is or feels to be in the idiom of Wilde's period [no pun intended] and sort of falls into good use once a few lines have been read. possibly there's a little to much enjambment but again. the they do work in giving the reader new directions on what to think.
if i have a question it's this:
why on earth would you want to fuck about with it?
oh and;
Dear Oscar, all your words have taken wing
reads like something i'd right and that's definitely a no no.
if i had some constructive thought it would be to separate the rhyming couplet as it makes me want to see a rhyming sonnet.
i suppose i could find something i didn't like about or within the poem but to do so i'd have to take the part out of context. the inversion in the very first line is something i'd normally call out but the poem is or feels to be in the idiom of Wilde's period [no pun intended] and sort of falls into good use once a few lines have been read. possibly there's a little to much enjambment but again. the they do work in giving the reader new directions on what to think.
if i have a question it's this:
why on earth would you want to fuck about with it?
oh and;
Dear Oscar, all your words have taken wing
reads like something i'd right and that's definitely a no no.
if i had some constructive thought it would be to separate the rhyming couplet as it makes me want to see a rhyming sonnet.