10-25-2015, 07:45 PM
(10-25-2015, 08:37 AM)Leanne Wrote: Any suggestions for the last lines? I'd quite like to keep the wing/spring thing because of the Happy Prince and of course, the giant, but I'm open to anything else (and even changing that if it needs to go). Would it work if I had:
Dear Oscar, all your words have taken wing
?
Some possibilities (all terrible, of course): I think 'wing' should allude to the Happy Prince swallow, else it's a bit of a waste.
Dear Oscar, all your words have taken wing
And swallow-like in our green gardens sing.
OR
Swallow-like your words have taken wing
And though our giant's gone, he lives on in the spring.