12-24-2015, 03:30 PM
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12-22-2015, 12:19 PM
[audio: https://m.soundcloud.com/christopher-you...cals-draft]
A Song About Love
[Verse]
Oh, my love, look what the day's done.
It started off sweet . . .
How have I ended up
Feeling so achingly incomplete?
Everything I ever wanted
Was right here, between my fingers.
I guess the world must be wicked after all—
It took your smile and made it sting.
[Chorus]
This song is about love,
How it hurts you to your knees,
Makes, "Come home soon,
"Baby, won't you?,"
Turn to, "Please! Please!"
[Verse]
And what am I
Supposed to love now?
Must be the pain
Since there's nothing else.
I'm trying to be proud,
But the heart knows how to break:
Where you're strongest,
It just adds memories.
[Chorus, soft]
This song is about love.
It makes your prayers into fragile things,
When what you want most,
It won't let you keep.
[Chorus, loud]
Said, this song is about love,
Makes a man say the strangest things,
Like, "Hallelujah!,"
And, "I want it again."
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—Note, the lyrics above differ slightly from the audio. But the ones above are the more recent draft.
—also, I posted this in misc, but should've posted here. My intention is to get this as close to "great" as possible, and then to get it recorded professionally as part of an audition package I can use to get a job with, so any comments, big or small, that I can use to make this a better song lyrically, I'd be happy to hear 'em.
12-22-2015, 12:19 PM
[audio: https://m.soundcloud.com/christopher-you...cals-draft]
A Song About Love
[Verse]
Oh, my love, look what the day's done.
It started off sweet . . .
How have I ended up
Feeling so achingly incomplete?
Everything I ever wanted
Was right here, between my fingers.
I guess the world must be wicked after all—
It took your smile and made it sting.
[Chorus]
This song is about love,
How it hurts you to your knees,
Makes, "Come home soon,
"Baby, won't you?,"
Turn to, "Please! Please!"
[Verse]
And what am I
Supposed to love now?
Must be the pain
Since there's nothing else.
I'm trying to be proud,
But the heart knows how to break:
Where you're strongest,
It just adds memories.
[Chorus, soft]
This song is about love.
It makes your prayers into fragile things,
When what you want most,
It won't let you keep.
[Chorus, loud]
Said, this song is about love,
Makes a man say the strangest things,
Like, "Hallelujah!,"
And, "I want it again."
----------
—Note, the lyrics above differ slightly from the audio. But the ones above are the more recent draft.
—also, I posted this in misc, but should've posted here. My intention is to get this as close to "great" as possible, and then to get it recorded professionally as part of an audition package I can use to get a job with, so any comments, big or small, that I can use to make this a better song lyrically, I'd be happy to hear 'em.
A yak is normal.