Scrap Metal Furniture

[Mcfair]

I love the vivid imagery - the first three lines especially draw the reader in right from the get-go, and the "trendy café-slash-menswear-shop" is superb.  The rhythm, pace and tempo are likewise great, no nits here.  But, it feels unfinished, incomplete and has no discernable connection with the title.  It needs something to tie it all together.  This really is my kind of poem, for sure - loved it.