01-06-2016, 09:29 AM
Poet,
Thanks for your suggestions, those are some great eye-openers and will definitely help in my next revision! But first I must learn what inviolable(sounds like some form of violate) and turbid(idk why but instantly thought of turbo-chargers when I read this
) means. Hehe.
Will,
I see what you mean with these two lines, definitely a better way to phrase it but hmm not quite my style... You've made me think nonetheless so I thank you for that!
mike
Thanks for your suggestions, those are some great eye-openers and will definitely help in my next revision! But first I must learn what inviolable(sounds like some form of violate) and turbid(idk why but instantly thought of turbo-chargers when I read this
) means. Hehe.Will,
I see what you mean with these two lines, definitely a better way to phrase it but hmm not quite my style... You've made me think nonetheless so I thank you for that!
mike
Crit away