01-07-2016, 06:32 PM
Um.. I hope this was the autocorrects doing... But *stake
This poem doesnt work for me but only cuz ima pisces >:] every scorpio I ever met ended sadly for her, unfortunately lol
From a poetic standpoint, I've heard its very hard, if not impossible, to start a poem with a rhetorical question. I personally think L3 would be the strongest beginning line, and I might take the 'of' out of L4 and put an apostrophe 's' on scorpio. I'm also curious as to why you don't use punctuation, but some lines begin with a capital letter while others do not?
I think this could have potential with effort, im compelled now to write a poem about my experiences with scorpio women
Mike
This poem doesnt work for me but only cuz ima pisces >:] every scorpio I ever met ended sadly for her, unfortunately lol
From a poetic standpoint, I've heard its very hard, if not impossible, to start a poem with a rhetorical question. I personally think L3 would be the strongest beginning line, and I might take the 'of' out of L4 and put an apostrophe 's' on scorpio. I'm also curious as to why you don't use punctuation, but some lines begin with a capital letter while others do not?
I think this could have potential with effort, im compelled now to write a poem about my experiences with scorpio women
Mike
Crit away