01-21-2016, 12:04 AM
Second edit completed, which is most likely the final edit to this I will include here. Thanks to all for feedback.
Notes on the edit: One line break added to separate the final three lines.
Significant edits to the final half, removing the painfully ambiguous "it."
Lines 2 and 3 have been reworked, probably not to the liking of anyone here. (life/death + dark/light have stayed)
Various word changes.
The only line I am not happy with is the current line 7.
Notes on the edit: One line break added to separate the final three lines.
Significant edits to the final half, removing the painfully ambiguous "it."
Lines 2 and 3 have been reworked, probably not to the liking of anyone here. (life/death + dark/light have stayed)
Various word changes.
The only line I am not happy with is the current line 7.
If you're the smartest person in the room, you're in the wrong room.
"Or, if a poet writes a poem, then immediately commits suicide (as any decent poet should)..." -- Erthona
"Or, if a poet writes a poem, then immediately commits suicide (as any decent poet should)..." -- Erthona