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[Brujo]

Brujo, thanks for reading. Could you please explain what you mean with the regards to self expresion and rising in battle?  A reading it now perhaps vain glimpses is also slightly tongue twister so I'll see what I can do about that.

I think a different word there could garner more of a emotional response from the reader.  The poem goes from observing rain's "Final self-expression" (I'm assuming a suicide-like action) to the rain fighting for a meaningless cause. I can kind of see a connection there, but still find it difficult to bring S1 and S3 together.  

Hope that helps.