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American Beauties
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04-03-2016, 03:59 AM
71degrees, this is difficult to crit as it's such a smooth, polished piece. There really isn't anything wrong with it but I can make a suggestion: it might give this poem more depth if you went into and explored the romantic relationship at hand a bit. You might be able to draw out the emotions involved and that in turn may draw the reader into your work. Very pretty as it stands though. Thanks for the read,
- Matt 
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American Beauties - by 71degrees - 03-13-2016, 06:34 AM
RE: American Beauties - by Achebe - 03-13-2016, 07:11 AM
RE: American Beauties - by Tiger the Lion - 03-13-2016, 08:20 AM
RE: American Beauties - by Tracy Mitchell - 03-26-2016, 02:39 AM
RE: American Beauties - by 71degrees - 03-31-2016, 03:33 AM
RE: American Beauties - by whatisay-whatifeel - 03-31-2016, 01:43 PM
RE: American Beauties - by 71degrees - 04-03-2016, 09:44 AM
RE: American Beauties - by Mattp - 04-03-2016, 03:59 AM
RE: American Beauties - by (╯°□°）╯︵ ┻━┻ - 04-04-2016, 11:15 AM
RE: American Beauties - by 71degrees - 04-04-2016, 09:41 PM
RE: American Beauties - by REW - 04-05-2016, 10:56 AM
RE: American Beauties - by 71degrees - 04-08-2016, 06:01 AM
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