04-03-2016, 06:34 AM
After looking over other critiques of this poem as well as reading the poem I find that you have structured this poem as an argument. From the title "Convince me" as a sort of call to debate or perhaps just openly discuss what the speaker is feeling, to the structure of the poem itself. The placement of words opposes negative ad dangerous elements with positive ones. (Padded cell turned to artist lab, straight jacket the artists uniform. Blood and bones become brushes and paints.) This sort of structure suggests a feeling of detachment from others as a guy or gal pursues their art, become nuts or not nuts. But I have to agree with what Keith said in that the Duplex does not really fit and does little to explain why the surroundings of the speaker are truly important and by extent his mind is.