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Colette Peignot
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04-06-2016, 03:23 PM
A lovely piece, but the meaning of the lines seems forced to fit the rhyme in quite a few places. Perhaps something for the next iteration. Eg 'Prose and cons' - I get the pun, but how exactly are they bridging the gap etc through cons?
What's "quander"? 'Hail to the lovers of Mirbeau' ect fits the meter better
~ I think I just quoted myself - Achebe
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Colette Peignot - by Acephale - 04-06-2016, 12:25 PM
RE: Untitled - by Achebe - 04-06-2016, 03:23 PM
RE: Untitled - by billy - 04-06-2016, 07:09 PM
RE: Untitled - by taratica - 04-12-2016, 07:47 AM
RE: Untitled - by jeh - 04-07-2016, 12:02 PM
RE: Untitled - by Acephale - 04-08-2016, 06:27 AM
RE: Untitled - by jeh - 04-08-2016, 09:23 AM
RE: Untitled - by Acephale - 04-10-2016, 05:37 AM
RE: Untitled - by Achebe - 04-10-2016, 12:55 PM
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