05-24-2016, 10:58 PM
I enjoyed the poem alot, and I am new at leaving feedback so take it with a grain of sand:
The poem has great imagery and wonderful word choice, but the meter of the poem is interrupted in a few lines, giving it a slightly choppy feel. This is evident in "The gentle scrape as hands dug". It feels like there needs to be another beat in there, but this may be intentional, so as I said it is only my opinion.
Great work!
The poem has great imagery and wonderful word choice, but the meter of the poem is interrupted in a few lines, giving it a slightly choppy feel. This is evident in "The gentle scrape as hands dug". It feels like there needs to be another beat in there, but this may be intentional, so as I said it is only my opinion.
Great work!