Thoughts on Free Thought

[Seanwd98]

Thanks for sharing, Sean!  I love this proclamation of autonomy.  I've posted a few comments below.

I'm free to think and do as I please.--the poem maintains a consistent alternating stress pattern for most of the poem, except for this opening line? might this line be revised for consistent meter?
Unbound and freed by Socrates- --how does Socrates fit into the rest of the poem? might a few allusions make this connection stronger?
To live and dream and spread the word
Of lessons often left unheard.
For from within, one finds their peace.

I'm free to think and do as I please.
No walls or chains or locks or keys
Can suffocate or dominate
My innate need to cogitate. --again, how does Socrates fit in if this desire is innate?
For from within, one finds their peace. --mixing pronoun case here: on‌e=singular, their=plural
strong statement, that external barriers can't constrain inner wisdom/peace

I'm free to think and do as I please.
Opposing vile tyrannies- --does the content of these two lines match? does doing as one pleases (leisure-like) fit with protest?
A call to all, though few will heed. --this is my favorite line
By my own will I intercede. --intercede what?
For from within, one finds their peace.

I won’t be bound by foreign will.
No rule so bold and brash and shrill
Shall box my precious sanctity --I like that 'box' has followed the prison imagery from the second stanza
Of individuality.
By my own will I have found peace.

Thanks for sharing! -Kole

Thanks for the feedback! Here's a Socrates quote to clarify my connection- "To find yourself, think for yourself." This quote always resonated with me and was the inspiration for this poem. I will consider adding an additional stanza in order to clarify this. I'd like to point out that "their" is more commonly being used as a neutral singular preposition, an example might be, if you don't know the sex of a person and they have picked up a ball, you may say "they have picked up their ball," though I can see where the confusion comes from. To intercede is to intervene or speak out on behalf of another. This is meant to represent my position in acting as an ambassador on free thought, though I agree that it is difficult to understand in the context of the poem. I will consider revising. Thank you for the criticism!

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Thanks for sharing, Sean!  I love this proclamation of autonomy.  I've posted a few comments below.

I'm free to think and do as I please.--the poem maintains a consistent alternating stress pattern for most of the poem, except for this opening line? might this line be revised for consistent meter?
Unbound and freed by Socrates- --how does Socrates fit into the rest of the poem? might a few allusions make this connection stronger?
To live and dream and spread the word
Of lessons often left unheard.
For from within, one finds their peace.

I'm free to think and do as I please.
No walls or chains or locks or keys
Can suffocate or dominate
My innate need to cogitate. --again, how does Socrates fit in if this desire is innate?
For from within, one finds their peace. --mixing pronoun case here: on‌e=singular, their=plural
strong statement, that external barriers can't constrain inner wisdom/peace

I'm free to think and do as I please.
Opposing vile tyrannies- --does the content of these two lines match? does doing as one pleases (leisure-like) fit with protest?
A call to all, though few will heed. --this is my favorite line
By my own will I intercede. --intercede what?
For from within, one finds their peace.

I won’t be bound by foreign will.
No rule so bold and brash and shrill
Shall box my precious sanctity --I like that 'box' has followed the prison imagery from the second stanza
Of individuality.
By my own will I have found peace.

Thanks for sharing! -Kole

Additionally, I agree that the opening line is slightly awkward. I will definitely consider revising.