05-31-2016, 07:21 AM
Not often one sees JC and Manson in the same breath.
Why does Buddha get shortchanged? He and only a fool. All the rest of them get equal billing.
Teeter-totter poems like this are a tough sell, I think. You are presupposing one agrees w/your logic. Who says God is good? you? And please, I don't mean this in a mean way but think about it. By putting the poem into first person plural, you are making the assumption that the reader is part of the POV.
Also, based on the title, am I to assume you are the opposite of the Black Cat? Not sure I'm thinking this way at the beginning of the poem b/c I don't know what the poem is about but when I get to the end and look back, there it is.
All this being said, I like your attempt to take chances here. The entities you have chosen to make your cases are terrific. I think this is a poem worth working on.
Why does Buddha get shortchanged? He and only a fool. All the rest of them get equal billing.
Teeter-totter poems like this are a tough sell, I think. You are presupposing one agrees w/your logic. Who says God is good? you? And please, I don't mean this in a mean way but think about it. By putting the poem into first person plural, you are making the assumption that the reader is part of the POV.
Also, based on the title, am I to assume you are the opposite of the Black Cat? Not sure I'm thinking this way at the beginning of the poem b/c I don't know what the poem is about but when I get to the end and look back, there it is.
All this being said, I like your attempt to take chances here. The entities you have chosen to make your cases are terrific. I think this is a poem worth working on.