06-27-2016, 10:33 PM
I'm new to poetry, please correct me when I misinterpret your poem. I really want to learn how it works...
The form is clear to me, except I don't understand why the last paragraph doesn't start the same. What made you differ from your scheme?
What also made me curious is why you left the last sentence without a rhyme. I feel a bit unresolved by that, as if something is going to happen after this. Was that your intention?
The form is clear to me, except I don't understand why the last paragraph doesn't start the same. What made you differ from your scheme?
What also made me curious is why you left the last sentence without a rhyme. I feel a bit unresolved by that, as if something is going to happen after this. Was that your intention?
(05-25-2016, 02:38 AM)Seanwd98 Wrote: I'm free to think and do as I please.
Unbound and freed by Socrates-
To live and dream and spread the word
Of lessons often left unheard.
For from within, one finds their peace.
[ Lessons on how to live is what I read in this section. How knowing oneself is the way to become happy and not be disturbed by outside negative words.]
I'm free to think and do as I please.
No walls or chains or locks or keys
Can suffocate or dominate
My innate need to cogitate.
For from within, one finds their peace.
[ Roughly the same message, Knowing oneself is the armor shielding you from traps or attacks towards the mind.]
I'm free to think and do as I please.
Opposing vile tyrannies-
A call to all, though few will heed.
By my own will I intercede.
For from within, one finds their peace.
[People surrounding you may want to control you, because you divert from their 'normal'. Some may help you, but many will leave you]
I won’t be bound by foreign will.
No rule so bold and brash and shrill
Shall box my precious sanctity
Of individuality.
By my own will I have found peace.
[Here you already gave the clue, the human will.]
