downtown

[Magpie]

I agree with the current view on the last line. It doesn't seem to say anything, which is a shame because the buildup image is full of potential to bounce off... ah I didn't mean bounce off like because... ah it's alright.

This isn't a suggestion for an edit but more my inability to keep the joke that I saw to myself.

cigarette hangs from his lips—
the fat man and his bike
both too tired

And now I'm singing that tune... "When you're alone and life is making you lonely You can always go downtown" The melody is eccentrically beautiful, so all is cool.

Thanks for the read,

Mark