07-05-2016, 05:23 PM 
	
	
	
		Damn man, you need to bump the thread back to the top if you've done an edit or no-one will notice.
Don't worry I'll get this one
Bump
I like the latest edit that you've done, it's definitely the best yet, it's very atmospheric and less cryptic. It's a shame that you had to lose the 'Kings Crown' line but it was the right thing to do, you definitely need to use that line somehow for another poem it's a winner. I'll get back to you and offer some crit on your latest edit, for the moment just wanted to say great edit and
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Don't worry I'll get this one
Bump
I like the latest edit that you've done, it's definitely the best yet, it's very atmospheric and less cryptic. It's a shame that you had to lose the 'Kings Crown' line but it was the right thing to do, you definitely need to use that line somehow for another poem it's a winner. I'll get back to you and offer some crit on your latest edit, for the moment just wanted to say great edit
 and
 andBump
 
 
	 wae aye man ye radgie
 wae aye man ye radgie
 

 
