07-22-2016, 05:50 PM
The poem is simple, angry and lacks the inner peace that the poet strives for, which maybe the intent. The language is simple, style is simple and clean, the rhythm is strong and the last 'of individuality' is a nice accent.
'No walls or chains or locks or keys'- here, keys is a misfit in my opinion. All others, viz., the walls, chains and locks are elements of restraint, but keys open up stuff for the large part. I understand 'lock and key', a key opens as well as binds, but when we want to close something, we look for a lock, not a key. And i understand the poet's rhyme needs too, but maybe 'keys' is a bit out of place in my humble opinion.
The poet is in a bit of pessimistic mood, not having much hope for people hearing his call to oppose vile tyrannies. Maybe the poet feels good about being in a fight alone and maybe, feels like a knight. Well, only the poet would know. But in the end though, the poet talks about how he will not compromise his/her individuality and that is his inner peace. I kind of don't agree with the premise there, because of my own understanding of what inner peace can be. Buddha guides me there.
This poem is beautifully simple, uses some irony and is clearly an outlet for the poet's constrained mood. Thanks for sharing this poem.
'No walls or chains or locks or keys'- here, keys is a misfit in my opinion. All others, viz., the walls, chains and locks are elements of restraint, but keys open up stuff for the large part. I understand 'lock and key', a key opens as well as binds, but when we want to close something, we look for a lock, not a key. And i understand the poet's rhyme needs too, but maybe 'keys' is a bit out of place in my humble opinion.
The poet is in a bit of pessimistic mood, not having much hope for people hearing his call to oppose vile tyrannies. Maybe the poet feels good about being in a fight alone and maybe, feels like a knight. Well, only the poet would know. But in the end though, the poet talks about how he will not compromise his/her individuality and that is his inner peace. I kind of don't agree with the premise there, because of my own understanding of what inner peace can be. Buddha guides me there.
This poem is beautifully simple, uses some irony and is clearly an outlet for the poet's constrained mood. Thanks for sharing this poem.
(05-25-2016, 02:38 AM)Seanwd98 Wrote: I'm free to think and do as I please.
Unbound and freed by Socrates-
To live and dream and spread the word
Of lessons often left unheard.
For from within, one finds their peace.
I'm free to think and do as I please.
No walls or chains or locks or keys
Can suffocate or dominate
My innate need to cogitate.
For from within, one finds their peace.
I'm free to think and do as I please.
Opposing vile tyrannies-
A call to all, though few will heed.
By my own will I intercede.
For from within, one finds their peace.
I won’t be bound by foreign will.
No rule so bold and brash and shrill
Shall box my precious sanctity
Of individuality.
By my own will I have found peace.