Fish pond at midnight

[justlikeyou]

Frog sits on stone
Chanting for the others homage
Till moon disappears

One of the things that haiku eschew is telling the reader what to think, feel or imagine. L2 is the author's interpretation of what the frog is doing. Best to say what you see and leave what you think, feel or imagine out of the word picture.

a few examples less authorial intrusion.

on a stone
the croaking frog
moonset

moonset
the croaking frog
on a stone

the croaking frog
on a stone
moonset

The examples you've shared don't appear to follow the untraditional hauki 5-7-5 scheme, making it much more criptic....nevertheless, thanks for reading and commenting.


Luna

Hi Luna

You are correct. My haiku examples do not follow a 5-7-5 pattern. Very few these days do. The below link will take you to a few examples of modern haiku from the current issue of Frogpond, a published journal put out by the prestigious Haiku Society of America. There are many back issues of Frogpond found on the website as well if you wanted to see further examples.

HSA Frogpond Issue 39-1

Rick