10-18-2016, 06:33 PM
Right, sun/son -- sun sprays red light, son sprays red blood. I'd remove the comma from the second stanza, though, as I don't think it's needed, following this sense. And perhaps present tense in the first sentence? The title, too, I'm not too sure of, if only because it's not Christmas-y enough, and I'm not sure this is close to the usual fade-Christmas association of "Iiiii'llll be hoooome for Christmaaaas".