12-15-2016, 09:44 AM
I like the idea.
With two little ones of my own I can definitely relate.
I'm not sure, but "drips that haven't come to rest" sounds (to me) like the whole line was thrown in just for the sake of the rhyme and seems a tad redundant to me. I love the last line, it changes the tone of the poem from sort of sad to funny.
With two little ones of my own I can definitely relate. I'm not sure, but "drips that haven't come to rest" sounds (to me) like the whole line was thrown in just for the sake of the rhyme and seems a tad redundant to me. I love the last line, it changes the tone of the poem from sort of sad to funny.
I relish writing bad poems, if it means someday I'll write a good one.