12-20-2016, 09:38 PM
As a mom---I love it! I understand it....I have been there!
Honestly, it's refreshing to read a man's unique and humorous reflection on those instances in which mothers can feel quite alone in their role to sustain a little human...your poem reflects the reality of parenthood within those first months and years.
The mere juxtaposition of the title of your poem grabs the attention of the reader, and is carried throughout the poem.
Nice job :
I, personally, look forward to more parental poems from the father's perspective.
Thanks for sharing!
Honestly, it's refreshing to read a man's unique and humorous reflection on those instances in which mothers can feel quite alone in their role to sustain a little human...your poem reflects the reality of parenthood within those first months and years.
The mere juxtaposition of the title of your poem grabs the attention of the reader, and is carried throughout the poem.
Nice job :
I, personally, look forward to more parental poems from the father's perspective.
Thanks for sharing!
(12-15-2016, 02:08 AM)hesawacko Wrote: Hi all,
I've been trying to turn the angst of fatherhood into some humorous poetry... hopefully. Still very novice, but please feel free to hammer on this. I'd appreciate the feedback/thoughts.
LOVE AND PUKE
Warm and wet
I hear the splatter
But I'm too numb
For it to matter
Wetness spreads across my chest
Drips that haven't come to rest
I wipe your tears
I feel your slime
For you
I'll be here every time
Plaintive eyes and burning head
Abandon thoughts of sleep and bed
No more wondering if you're sick
I hug you close
And feel us stick