12-30-2016, 09:17 PM
"Beijing sienna, sandstorm brown" evokes enough for me that image of race, while that last line really reads unnecessary. Maybe change gray to a more fleshly color?
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Distrust (edit2, title chg) - by dukealien - 12-30-2016, 05:37 AM
RE: Impediments - by Achebe - 12-30-2016, 04:15 PM
RE: Impediments - by Mahjong - 12-30-2016, 06:34 PM
RE: Impediments - by RiverNotch - 12-30-2016, 09:17 PM
RE: Race (edit, title change) - by dukealien - 01-01-2017, 07:42 AM
RE: Race (edit, title change) - by Achebe - 01-01-2017, 08:57 AM
RE: Race (edit, title change) - by Lizzie - 01-01-2017, 07:45 AM
RE: Distrust (edit2, title chg) - by dukealien - 01-03-2017, 01:59 AM
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