01-01-2017, 07:42 AM
Edit1;
Race
Black clouds no less than white or pink,
Beijing sienna, sandstorm-brown,
can block the light of Heaven.
Thanks to all the critics, very good advice which I've applied in this edit (though I couldn't quite shake out the urge to give a hint as to the subject in mind - see below - but the original title was vapid anyway).
@RiverNotch - Good 1, we don't think of pink clouds as opaque, but they are - just lit from below, sometimes by a sun that's already set or about to rise (and a variant of white).
@Mahjong - The "no less than" construction is a bit archaic and convoluted, true. It was meant"[S]andstorm brown" is intended to bring in the desert (Semitic/Arab) peoples as also capable of blocking Heaven's light individually, perhaps it should be on its own line to prevent the association you made.
@everyone - Does the message still get through without the fourth line? It seems to me that without some hint at context it fails to bite, like the famous Meiji/Showa
Race
Black clouds no less than white or pink,
Beijing sienna, sandstorm-brown,
can block the light of Heaven.
Thanks to all the critics, very good advice which I've applied in this edit (though I couldn't quite shake out the urge to give a hint as to the subject in mind - see below - but the original title was vapid anyway).
@RiverNotch - Good 1, we don't think of pink clouds as opaque, but they are - just lit from below, sometimes by a sun that's already set or about to rise (and a variant of white).
@Mahjong - The "no less than" construction is a bit archaic and convoluted, true. It was meant
@everyone - Does the message still get through without the fourth line? It seems to me that without some hint at context it fails to bite, like the famous Meiji/Showa
Methinks all the people of the world are brethren, then. Why are the waves and the wind so unsettled nowadays?
Non-practicing atheist

