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Devolution
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01-08-2017, 06:01 PM
Suddenly, meter! It's still rhythmically spotty in a few places, but I think billy's right -- if not a wholesale revision, how about a wholesale excision? I think the shortness of a work helps mask any holes -- otherwise, like I said. I might return to the current edit in more detail, but for now, good job!
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Devolution - by Mark Cecil - 01-05-2017, 03:23 AM
RE: Devolution - by Achebe - 01-05-2017, 05:19 AM
RE: Devolution - by QDeathstar - 01-05-2017, 07:18 AM
RE: Devolution - by Mark Cecil - 01-05-2017, 07:30 AM
RE: Devolution - by Erthona - 01-05-2017, 09:05 AM
RE: Devolution - by Mark Cecil - 01-05-2017, 10:15 AM
RE: Devolution - by rollingbrianjones - 01-05-2017, 11:29 AM
RE: Devolution - by Mark Cecil - 01-07-2017, 10:46 AM
RE: Devolution - by Achebe - 01-06-2017, 06:19 AM
RE: Devolution - by rollingbrianjones - 01-07-2017, 11:03 AM
RE: Devolution - by RiverNotch - 01-08-2017, 12:38 AM
RE: Devolution - by Mark Cecil - 01-08-2017, 06:40 AM
RE: Devolution - by billy - 01-08-2017, 08:34 AM
RE: Devolution - by Mark Cecil - 01-08-2017, 09:17 AM
RE: Devolution - by rollingbrianjones - 01-08-2017, 10:13 AM
RE: Devolution - by billy - 01-08-2017, 11:26 AM
RE: Devolution - by RiverNotch - 01-08-2017, 06:01 PM
RE: Devolution - by Achebe - 01-08-2017, 07:31 PM
RE: Devolution - by Mark Cecil - 01-08-2017, 08:45 PM
RE: Devolution - by rollingbrianjones - 01-12-2017, 11:54 AM
RE: Devolution - by Mark Cecil - 01-15-2017, 03:06 AM
RE: Devolution - by rollingbrianjones - 01-17-2017, 11:09 AM
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