Dance of the Megafauna

[amaril]

So after about a million years, I finally bothered to revise the this poem's lackluster ending. I felt (and still feel) that the first two stanzas were polished in the original, so I left them as-is. RiverNotch--the excessive consonance is intended, so I added some sweet 'f' sounds to compliment the 's's. I also like the restrained sentences here, in part because I am prone to run-ons. However, it is def possible that the sentence structure/length could be more varied.

I am vaguely concerned that the tone of the original poem was compromised by the addition of stanzas, but that might be a good thing anyway.

edit. I've made a number of small edits to R1 since posting it.