Innocence returning (Edit 1)

[dukealien]

There’s a cold breeze
coming through the back door  "coming" seems a bit weak - sighing or moaning, or better
causing it to creak on its hinges,  more descriptive in place of "its" - "rusting" or even "fitless"
Grandad's gone across the backs  this line is beautiful in every way:  picturing tar-papered roofs like an ill-fitting cape across the shoulders of kneeling, decrepit tenement buildings
to feed his pigeons.

I find him inside the empty loft
closing derelict cages,
gently I place an arm
around the confusion.  exactly right line
Using soft words we stumble outside
towards real moments.  another good one

The overgrown allotment glistens
through droplets, strung out
to tremble in the damp morning light.  "liquid" for "damp?"  just a thought
We hear the rush of racing pigeons
and watch them disappear overhead  "vanish" for "disappear," but could make the rhythm too simple
like ghosts into field mist.  getting the picture, and *must* have ghosts, but reads more awkwardly than necessary IMHO

Grandad stood staring at the sky,
“they’re not coming back are they son?”  want a comma after "back," but it would break the brokenness
I put my coat around his shoulders,
‘no Grandad they’ve been gone too long”.
We start the slow walk back towards the house.

“Someone will have to tell your Grandma,  add "son" at the end?  or would that be too lyric?
she loved those birds”
“She’s gone too Grandad,
Grandma’s gone too”.  "too" repeated, perfect finish.

This is so very good, in both concept and execution, it's hard to critique at all.  My notes above are barely suggestions, might find one that's an actual improvement or leads to one.  A fine read, and thank you.