03-02-2017, 11:26 AM
Nibbed,
Thank you very much for the feedback, I tried to incorporate a bit more of what you felt was missing, and youre right about the title being more of a tribute. Working on a change rn.
Teeky,
Thank you so much for the critique, an awesome first crit! I made a lot of changes which hopefully clears things up for you, and yes, the 's' on 'blind' was a typo, thanks for noticing!
Todd,
I really like the idea of sequencing couplets and decided to run with it. My concern now is whether the rhymes feel forced or natural on the reader. I agree with you on the title, it holds more of a personal meaning and I realize that now, working on a change. Thank you for your thoughts.
mike
Thank you very much for the feedback, I tried to incorporate a bit more of what you felt was missing, and youre right about the title being more of a tribute. Working on a change rn.
Teeky,
Thank you so much for the critique, an awesome first crit! I made a lot of changes which hopefully clears things up for you, and yes, the 's' on 'blind' was a typo, thanks for noticing!
Todd,
I really like the idea of sequencing couplets and decided to run with it. My concern now is whether the rhymes feel forced or natural on the reader. I agree with you on the title, it holds more of a personal meaning and I realize that now, working on a change. Thank you for your thoughts.
mike
Crit away