03-17-2017, 03:03 AM
@ Wjames, Todd, Duke, Vanity, Lizzie. Thank you for all your excellent feedback, I'm sorry I haven't been back to this sooner but please don't take that a a lack of appreciation for the work you have all put in to your comments.
I have considered all the feed back and have attempted an edit, thanks to your guidance. I have focus on the opening and the end lines, I cut some of the dialogue sections and have another look at real moments as I agree this stanza needs tightening. Very much appreciated Keith
I have considered all the feed back and have attempted an edit, thanks to your guidance. I have focus on the opening and the end lines, I cut some of the dialogue sections and have another look at real moments as I agree this stanza needs tightening. Very much appreciated Keith
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