spring haiku, quantity 1, date: 2017-03-22
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(03-30-2017, 03:48 AM)burrealist Wrote:  
(03-29-2017, 04:34 PM)rayheinrich Wrote:  
(03-28-2017, 03:37 AM)burrealist Wrote:  One word each line- nice.

The tension in the poem is created by the paradox of something being new more than once.
That's not possible, yet spring manages to pull off this miracle every year.
So... with that in mind, come up with another word that fits and I'll use it.
(Except for 'neoteric', no way I'll use that one.) Smile
Do you want a short, simple word?
Because short words are typically colloquial.

Looking through a thesaurus- here is a list of considerations:

-Breathe (but azaleas don't have lungs)
-Live (although still colloquial, and probably not as powerful as "new")
-Prevail (may be misleading)
-Exist (have they ever not existed?)
-Mortalize (not a word, apparently)
-Be (kind of elusive and strange)
-Become (maybe?)
-Continue (this word seems to create that tension)
-Last (this is elusive, although it creates tension)

I think 'breathe' (in poetry, azaleas don't have to have lungs), 'live', and 'are' (be)
would all make good poems, but wouldn't mean what using 'new' means.
'Last' and 'continue' would create the same tension.
I think the closest is 'become' so I'll use that one.
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RE: spring haiku #2017-03-22 - by Lizzie - 03-23-2017, 03:29 PM
RE: spring haiku #2017-03-22 - by rayheinrich - 03-24-2017, 03:00 PM
RE: spring haiku #2017-03-22 - by burrealist - 03-28-2017, 03:37 AM
RE: spring haiku #2017-03-22 - by rayheinrich - 03-29-2017, 04:34 PM
RE: spring haiku #2017-03-22 - by burrealist - 03-30-2017, 03:48 AM
RE: spring haiku #2017-03-22 - by rayheinrich - 03-30-2017, 10:50 AM
RE: spring haiku #2017-03-22 - by amaril - 03-30-2017, 12:39 PM
RE: spring haiku #2017-03-22 - by rayheinrich - 03-30-2017, 02:47 PM
RE: spring haiku #2017-03-22 - by Lizzie - 03-30-2017, 02:49 PM
RE: spring haiku #2017-03-22 - by rayheinrich - 03-30-2017, 02:59 PM
RE: spring haiku #2017-03-22 - by Lizzie - 03-31-2017, 05:12 PM
RE: spring haiku #2017-03-22 - by burrealist - 03-31-2017, 01:11 AM



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