Chilled
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(04-01-2017, 11:12 AM)litQueen Wrote:  You are shivering, In haiku, focus and simplicity is key. "You are" should be as relevant as life itself. In this case, I feel like they are words taking up space to fit a syllabic count. Those words aren't meaningful (to me. I don't speak for everyone).
Wearing a leather jacket. So why is the leather jacket significant? What does it indicate about this person, or about the surroundings? Is it a trap, a superficial attitude, a dead cow...? 
You love to be cold.
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Chilled - by litQueen - 04-01-2017, 11:12 AM
RE: Chilled - by Lizzie - 04-01-2017, 12:17 PM
RE: Chilled - by burrealist - 04-04-2017, 05:06 AM



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