05-04-2017, 02:44 PM
Overall, the humor angle works well. I agree with many of the other comments that given it's a humor / cute / loving piece that some of the wording can be more in line with that objective.
But ... I am thinking you have it in you to make those adjustments.
By the way, the words "Love and Puke" have different meanings for me. Whenever, I lay the sweet nothings on too thickly, my wife exclaims "Puke"!!
But ... I am thinking you have it in you to make those adjustments.
By the way, the words "Love and Puke" have different meanings for me. Whenever, I lay the sweet nothings on too thickly, my wife exclaims "Puke"!!