cherished

[Mark Cecil]

Hey nibbed really liked your poem.  I appreciate a good religious poem now and again but understand its hard for those of no faith to have the same appreciation

It's best not
to painfully watch. As already noted I'm not a big fan of the inversion here perhaps "to watch painfully" is preferable.  I'd only keep inversion if your trying to write in meter but this poem is free verse.

I'm not as poor
as the bits of hamburger I don't like the use of hamburger here it strikes images of commercialism rather than image I think your trying to create of a cow being eaten by the piranhas.  Perhaps the use of the word beef might be more appropriate. However I think you could maybe focus on the end of cattle's life rather than who eats them as it would parallel more with the end of human life in the next two stanzas
thrown in a piranha tank;

you see, I know
my end will really be
my beginning, Some might find this offensive if they don't agree but I quite like it probably because I agree.

unlike the souls of men 
who suffer intensely
never having been
cherished in this world
as they should have been. I won't want to focus too much on those who suffer in the afterlife but that's just me.

They almost
cannot comprehend the One
who holds back the flooding tides,

He who spins the Earth
and nurses the galaxies
in His palm good imagery

might just be
truly in love with them. There doesn't appear to be much hope for them as there already dead