cherished

[Achebe]

It's best not
to painfully watch.

I'm not as poor
as the bits of hamburger
thrown in a piranha tank;   ... don't understand how hambgurger is 'poor'

you see, I know
my end will really be
my beginning,.....this theme has been done to death, and really, after East Coker, you can't use this anymore 

unlike the souls of men ....you know unlike the souls of men? Is that a valid comparison?
who suffer intensely
never having been
cherished in this world 
as they should have been. ..... why should they have been? At this stage, it's looking a little incoherent ans incomprehensible 

They almost
cannot comprehend the One
who holds back the flooding tides, ....holds or held? A reference to the biblical myth is okay, but saying that the One "holds back the flooding tides" in the present tense is ignorance of physics and geography 

He who spins the Earth
and nurses the galaxies
in His palm .....you are going for grandeur here, but the images are hackneyed and do not inspire 

might just be
truly in love with them.     ..... prosaic 

Hello nibbed - spiritual poetry is song. Make it more lyrical.
Best.