Joe

[67eager]

After a couple of reads, I came to enjoy this poem somewhat. The way I see it, you seem to suggest that moving around through space is the best way to live a fulfilling life. 'Eat bread' seems to mean that food is not that important in the large scheme of things. The last lines I also found quite powerful, and may even incite me to get off this forum and go outside. One critique I and many others would make would be your punctuation and rhymes. By fragmenting this whole poem with semi colons and full stops, you don't allow for any flow. As for the rhymes, I feel as though some are not necessary:



A student of mine, named Joe, asked me recently, “Why do we forget the simple joy of being alive”?  This courageous lady had survived a major accident and was happy just to be alive. It got me thinking.
 
                Joe
First, travel far all day. Winter. Cold.. - Perhaps 'even in winter cold' would make more sense?
Then turn the corner. Find the bay. all ok.  -'All ok' seems a bit forced to me. Find the bay on its own rhymes with 'travel all day' so I wouldn't bother with 'all ok'
It’s mostly mortar, bricks and water. Old. -In this instance, you make good use of internal rhymes 
Now night brings shadows, mist and fog; white bay. -'A white bay' seems a little bit odd, when considerinthat you talking about a dark night,
 
Hotel is fine. eat bread; Soft bed. feel good - 'Feels good' seems more correct to me
Protected cave. A starry night; asleep. A comma would work better here I think
Full Moon; a storm blows, river flows: loud wood. -'Loud wood' doesn't really fit in this otherwise well done line.
A ray of light. So, drink in day; Awake. -I don't quite understand this line. What'/ wrong with drinking at night?
 
A rolling stone. Content. Yet, short is life,
And time goes. Flash in pan, is all I am.
A humbling thought. So, pause; feel joy; alive. I think that 'be alive' would work better here.
So precious. Lose so easy. Distractions. Spam.  'Lost easily'
 
An honour. Able to see, all nature’s forms. Scrap of the comma here
Then travel far. Lose the bay. Humble. Warm..  this line is very effective