misplaced summer Day in May for Ray (edit)
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"Tempt" is weak. The word itself is ugly. I have a slight stammer and find it too lippy.
Also, L2 feels overly long
How about:

Early showers:
earthworms, lilacs
burst.
~ I think I just quoted myself - Achebe
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RE: misplaced summer Day in May for Ray - by Achebe - 05-23-2017, 07:33 PM
RE: misplaced summer Day in May for Ray (edit) - by just mercedes - 05-25-2017, 03:58 PM



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