05-24-2017, 07:33 AM
(05-24-2017, 07:02 AM)rayheinrich Wrote:Ha reading it now it's pretty close to a 575, unintentional.(05-24-2017, 06:42 AM)ellajam Wrote: Thanks ray, I originally thought of earthworms rising but couldn't tie it together.
an early shower
obliges the earthworm to rise
the lilac to burst.
maybe
Like it -- not so much a haiku, as haiku-like. But I have no bias here, the latter are often my favorites
And given two subjects and the action, they're much better expressed as a slightly more complex poem.
But yeah, not really concerned with a label, just a halfway decent poem, and besides, I'm having fun.
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