misplaced summer Day in May for Ray (edit)

[ellajam]

I agree. The rearrangement allows us to experience 2 events and then a cut to the connection. Subtle change but completely different.

Yep, I had moved shower down one slot, hadn't shuffled it down there. I love this site, the swoop and kill.

    Though I think it only fair that we tie both of mercedes hands behind her back and blindfold her;
    give the rest of us a chance... oh, she'd probably just get better, creative constraint and all.

The poem's been up for 5 days, she did give me a chance, in fact, multiple chances. I might have gotten there..someday...maybe...

It's like the shoemaker's elves, I'm not complaining.