Water and Sky (Thread Closed)

[Vonstevenstien]

I feel like this work has a solid foundation. To me, it felt like you were describing how quickly life can change. One minute you're on top of the world and before you know it, you're washed out again. Really loved how you used the ocean and it's tide as a microcosm for acute change.
In my opinion; don't limit it's potential by trying to make all the words ryhme.
This is good stuff
(Grain of salt-this is my first rodeo!)