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05-28-2017, 11:57 PM
Hey bud, I'm new to this as well. Can I maybe suggest using a few similes? Like "Your eyes are beautiful, they sparkle like diamonds" I mean, don't use that because it's cliche and kinda cheesy, but you get where I'm going with it. lol
Keep at it, man. I'd love to hear the revision or your next work |
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