06-02-2017, 09:00 AM
(06-02-2017, 07:21 AM)Achebe Wrote: Something about you
this morning, with the roses
blown delicately in the early winter's
morning, came to my mind.
As I have nothing to do but ponder
on my dawn bus ramble
through suburban gardens,
of a green and golden city
long left behind -
something about it, this morning, in the gardens
came to my mind.
l´d erase the comma after "gardens".
It´s nice, a flashback-like dream. maybe you could somehow add a hint of what the "something" was, because it left me somewhat pondering (as well, but maybe that´s the point).