Water and Sky (Thread Closed)

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Hi, I would love to hear some feedback about my poem. Thanks. 

Water and Sky

Once I rode atop of the tide. 
Since I was so high, it seemed fine to shut my eyes.

Then I reached out my hand to touch the sky.  
Air slipped through my fingers, so I opened my eyes.
This somewhat confuses me. What else were you expecting, the air not to slip through your fingers?
I glanced below, and saw no tide.
Instead of saying "you saw no tide", try to find a more creative and powerful way to say the same message
I was cornered by shallow water on every side. 

From now on, I will not shut my eyes.
I look for deep waters, but don’t know where they lie.