ellipsis

[Tiger the Lion]

Hello Janine. I've looked at this a few times. The title is much better now IMO. I don't like to encroach too heavily on other's work, but something occurred to me I thought I'd share...

ellipsis


Moments require a pause
and clues will float into space,

but please
remember to place
the proper number of marks

. . .

if you said something like " please remember to mark them appropriately" you might add a layer of meaning. - Mark the moment, mark the pause. Just a thought. Your poem. 

Thanks for the read,
Paul





ORIGINAL

. . .


Moments require a pause
and clues will float into space,

but please
remember to leave
the proper number of marks:

ellipsis.