07-19-2017, 12:39 PM
Quote:Beautiful
You are beautiful because your eyes are lovely A bit bland, but it definitely drills the idea of being beautiful. As someone said before, lovely and beautiful both are similar in context, so might want to change it.
You are beautiful because you look unbelievably good in your new dress Ah, repetition. This conveys a better image than Line 1, a woman figure with a dress pops up
You are beautiful because your lips are so amazing to kiss Not a big fan, I guess since kissing is more of an action, but one that I wouldn't apply to kissing.
You are beautiful because you are fearfully and wonderfully made I like how the adverbs contrast
You are beautiful because your skin is so soft I feel a comparison would do good here
You are beautiful because you have the most perfect... I suggest that this isn't the ending, if you planned on that
With poetry, you might want to include comparisons and be more elaborate. This sadly didn't do much to me personally. I suggest having four line stanzas beginning with a phrase with beautiful in it.
Sweet and Sour Love,
Raspberry Lemonade, Aced and Arrowed
Smooth is my tongue,
Sharper are my teeth