Something about you

[Lydish]

Something about you
this morning, with the roses
blown delicately in the early winter
gardens, came to my mind.
My thoughts have nothing to do but amble,
on a dawn bus ride
past backyard and bramble,
through a fog bound city,
its blackened brick walls
left behind.
Something about it, this morning, in the gardens
came to mind.

I'm not sure if this is what you meant, but what I got out of this is someone's beloved died in the blackened (bombed, if meant literally, but also just sad/left behind?) city and they're mourning both. I wonder what the significance of it being roses is, or if it's just the image you had in your head at the time. Both would be lovely. Some niggles I had with a the lines I bolded:

- "Blown delicately" stood out to me as the only line that didn't roll off the tongue easily. I think 1) because "delicately" is a long word compared to the others you use, and 2) because "blown delicately" is weird phrasing to me? I wonder if there's another way to phrase this line with two or one syllable words? Also, it's not clear to me whether you mean the petals are sifted or whether it's the whole roses waving in the wind. So could go for something more specific in the wording. (nitpicking a bit too, because the poem as a whole is very well thought out)

- On a second read, I noticed that you can't amble while /on/ a bus ride. Your bus ride can be ambling, or you can amble towards the bus or after the bus...

- I would probably line break after "something about it," since it seems like you're trying to parallel with the first few lines. Might've just been a typo.

Overall, I really love this poem and have read it over and over. Concise but specific and meaningful.

Is your username a reference to Chinua Achebe, btw? ;-)